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A story that came true

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“That’s an awesome idea!” I laughed, to my friend. We were making a story, where me and him, were friends with SlenderMan, Jeff, and The pocket. My friend had come up with a funny idea for the story, it was the best idea he had so far. “Well I try” he said also laughing. By the way, did I introduce myself? No I don’t think I did. I’m Libby, I’m british and female, my friend his nickname was soul. I called him Soul because, well we decided that creepy “Code-names” would be rather amusing. We had other friends that helped with the story. Their nicknames were: Ghost as he was interested in the pokemon “Ghost” Creepypasta. Jeff.T was interested in the “Jeff The Killer” Creepypasta. Slender was most interested in the SlenderMan, and he was also extremely thin, so I guess it kinda fits him. Pocket, was interested in “The pocket” or the creature from “Skype” she didn’t mind which. I was called Spirit, because I’m often high spirited. We all worked on the story as a group. Some group of jerks call us freaks for liking Creepypasta, but we often reply with something like: “Well at least we have the guts to watch and read it”. Back to the story, Soul had come up with an idea that we scare the hell out of the group that called us freaks, in the story. After school, the whole group of us met up at Soul’s house. Soul told the group about his idea and they all laughed hysterically. “Dude, best idea ever.” Ghost grinned, looking around the group. “I can tell, our story’s going to be big once we publish it on the internet” Smiled Slender. “Yep, I guess so,” I said in a somewhat quiet voice. Even though me and soul came up with the idea of the story, I was more quiet than the rest, I decided to let them make ideas. Pocket gave a defiant look and declared “We’ll be the best story writers the internet has ever seen!” Jeff.T laughed “Everyone at school will see who we really are!” I looked around, and for a split second, I’m sure I just imagined it, I saw everyone as the creature they were nicknamed after accept for Soul. Luckily no one noticed my eyes slightly widen, and quickly blink. Then I said something… just plain weird for me. “I know! How about instead of writing in words, how about we animate it and make it into a series?” The group quickly turned to look at me. “Wh-what? What did you say?” Ghost replied. The whole group looked at me surprised at what I said. Even I got confused. “What did I just say? you all look, confused, as if I said something I don’t usually say…” “Y-you said we should make an animated series of our story,” Slender looked at me looking somewhat scared. “I did? hmmm,” I tried thinking, but I didn’t remember saying a word. “Umm, are you okay or what?” Soul looked at me eyes wide. “Yeah, just….. nevermind, I just wasn’t thinking” I replied still trying to clear my head. The group decided to split for the day and work on other things like homework and things like that. That night I dreamed of that image I saw, but one thing ruined it, I saw myself, grinning at me, with a knife in hand. I pulled out my sword, and we fought. I woke up in fright. “What was that?” I whispered, I looked at my TV. “I fell asleep without knowing again. The Nintendo WII is still on… Maybe watching something on YouTube will help calm me down.” So I got the WII remote and browsed videos. The next day in class I sat next to Soul, but I said nothing, I just listened. When the group met, we met at my house, I told everyone, why I think I was being weird yesterday and about the dream. “Hmmm, wait, you told us, when you were 6 you had nightmares that happened again, and again.” Pocket said, in a surprised tone “You know when a shadow version of yourself tried killing you?” “Yes, I know, but I think I have an idea for the story,” I replied. “How about evil versions of all of us, try kill us.” The group seemed to like the idea, as they grinned and then nodded. I grinned with them, but I didn’t know why… Maybe I was just my regular happy self. The next few days the group worked on the animation and voicing for episode one of our animated series of our story, since the team decided it was a decent idea. That night, I dreamed of that other me again, this time she spoke to me. “Heh heh heh heh heh. You’re as weak as you look.” and then she… stabbed me, with the knife she held before. But I got up, ignoring the pain, and I… grinned, and I spoke “Just remember, we are the same person” I shot awake, wondering, why the hell I had the same sort of dream. and I went back to sleep. The next day when I woke up, can you guess what I saw?
Credit To – SnivyTheRuler
Credit Link – http://www.youtube.com/user/SnivyTheRuler

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  1. Ok let’s review this. So you and some friends were writing this creepypasta or soon to be crappypasta. Then you introduce yourself and your friends. Which is weird how that is kinda out of order. So I suggest telling your story in correct order. You talk about how much you like creepypasta and similar stuff. This kinda reminds of Jealousy where the main character tries way too hard to sell her self as a nerd. It’s not as bad here though.

    You then get back to the actually story. You guys have this great idea for a story and then you see your friends as demons or something. Ok. Moving on. You then you suggest that you animate it. Your friends react as if you said they should call each other stupid code names. Opps sorry. But, then you all leave and that night you have a bad dream. You tell your friends then Pockets(WTF) says you had bad dreams when you were six. As though this might be relevant. But it never is.

    You then suggest you guys fight shadow version of yourself in the pasta. Then you go to sleep again and bad dream. And you said I can guess what you saw. Well I can. Was it a unicorn? No. Umm…. A knight Walrus? No. What was it? Your shadow self? I checked your youtube. I was expecting the usual 13 year old with just minecraft vids. But you were a 11 year old girl with um not for sure what your videos were about but, it was a bit surprising.

    1\10 Sorry for it being so long.

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  2. GRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    This was the most dreadful piece of crap I’ve read in a couple of weeks. Give up, just give up, never do that again.

    Talk of giving the British a bad name. Mr Blobby could’ve written a better story.

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  3. I only got to “where me and him, were friends with SlenderMan, Jeff, and The pocket.” and I had to stop. HOW MANY TIMES DO WE HAVE TO TELL YOU WERE NEVER, AND NEVER (OR SURE AS HELL IF YOU WRITE THEM) WILL BE SCARY! Please, try something original.

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    • Slenderman used to be scary until the Fangirls came along.

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  4. It makes me wonder, why the hell would someone put commas in random places? Is this a new trend or something?

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    • ,hmm,,what?,

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  5. Be original! Taking everyone else’s ideas and trying to throw them into a story is not good!

    It makes all of us angry.

    It makes us all very angry.

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  6. You and your friends thought that your story about being friends with well-known creepypasta monsters would make you famous? I’d say that it could happen if your story was well recognized on this site, but I know even that isn’t true. You are nowhere near the first person to have that idea and, unfortunately, you won’t be the last. That story would have just been one more unnoticed squirt into the massive diarrhea river of self-insertion pastas.

    Luckily, you and your friends had enough common sense to abandon that idea. Sure, the idea that replaced it is just as unoriginal, (pretty much any children’s cartoon has had an episode with this premise) but it’s at least not quite as bad.

    Had your story not been filled with completely useless details, (most of which seemed like they were going to be tied into the story somehow, but never were) it still would have been pretty bad. Most of that is because of lack of originality explained above, but also because it’s pretty boring to read a story about you writing a story that you wrote, that I’m reading.

    Not related to the story, but tytiger10, I hate to disappoint you, but it wasn’t me. I tend not to hang out in sleeping children’s bedrooms, waiting for them to wake up unless I have a very good reason to. It tends to not go over well with the authorities for some reason.

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  7. My god this pasta. Can we just burn it with fire already?

    1. The grammar was terrible. There were commas in completely random places, and no commas where there needed to be commas.
    2. The structure of this was also awful. You start with the story and then introduce yourself and your friends. Then you attempt to get back to this crap that you call a story.
    3. Oh, and speaking of you and your friends. Saying that you are a girl and British was pointless and added nothing to the story except from that point on I read it in a British accent. And no one cares about your dumb little nicknames. We get that you like most of the overrated pasta monsters, and then calling yourselves by their names just made me groan in irritation. You have made yourself and your friends dreadfully annoying and unlikable.
    4. Ok, so you get back to the story. Apparently one of your friends had a great idea. Please, do tell us that idea. Maybe it would be better than this pasta, but I doubt it.
    5. Oh, so you got bullied because you like creepypastas and the best come back you could come up with is, “Well at least we have the guts to watch and read it.” Oh man, watch out everyone. We have some badasses over here.
    6. If you guys really think you will be the best story writers the internet has seen, you are all clearly experiencing the Dunning-Kruger effect. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dunning%E2%80%93Kruger_effect There is a link so you can inform yourself that no. You are not the best story writers ever. It is just an overcompensation of your lackluster abilities to write.
    7. At this point, you still did not tell the readers what the idea was. It was incredibly annoying, especially when you mentioned that you were going to animate it. It would be nice to know what was going to be animated.
    8. “That night I dreamed of that image I saw, but one thing ruined it, I saw myself, grinning at me, with a knife in hand. I pulled out my sword, and we fought. I woke up in fright. ” No one cares about what you dreamed, especially since it was lame and not scary at all.
    9. Oh, so when you were 6 you had nightmares. How terrifying. I would also like to point out that young children tend to have nightmares more often than adults do. So, having nightmares when you were 6 is not that unusual.
    10. What did you see? No, really. You can’t do that. What did you see? Your mom, a talking potato, a 10-foot tall purple platypus? I’m going to go with the platypus because it is entertaining, unlike this pasta.
    11. Nothing scary happened in this. NOTHING.

    Once again, can we burn this with fire? The hellish grammar, annoying characters, and the lack of anything scary in this pasta, and the concept in general make me cringe. This is well deserving of a F. Please don’t attempt to rewrite this. No amount of editing can save this or make it any better.

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  8. What kind of nickname is “soul”? What creepypasta has something called soul? Wouldn’t it make ten times more sense to call him Ben after Ben drowned? You know, because that is an actual name? Any why don’t you get a nickname? I feel ashamed coming from the same country as you.

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  9. Ugh.. Well “Jealousy” made me crack up and it was actually unintentional which is part of why it was also so funny. This.. this is bad. I like to have a sense of humor when reading bad stories, but this was the wrong kind of bad. It was so bad I didn’t laugh… So yeah you CAN keep trying… don’t keep trying with THIS story though for the love of CAKE. Thanks.

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  10. “We’ll be the best story writers the internet has ever seen!”

    Obviously, the author was trying to include the literary effects of irony in this pasta’s plotline.

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  11. “Luckily no one noticed my eyes slightly widen, and quickly blink”. Yeah, I hate it when people notice me doing that.

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  12. WAIT! WHAT DID SHE SEE?!?!?!?

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