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It all began when a group of people decided that it would fun to go out on a ghost hunting trip. There was five people. They all decided to go to an old  building that was once a Mental institution. The building was run down and old, and happened to have 5 floors. So the 3 men and two women decided to start the there night off around 9:00. After they got done setting up, They decided to split up, and have one person on each floor. Sarah decided to take the top floor, while Kim took the floor below her. The boys all took their spot around the 1st, 2nd, and 3rd floor. While they all set up there cameras, they realized that the walls were concrete, which made it soundproof. James, who was on the first floor, seen something at the corner of his eye that was tall and black, but soon brushed it off as if it was nothing. There was said to be a legend about a young girl named Emily, that died on the same exact floor that James was standing on. They say that she was Long and tall. She died a horrible death. No body noticed her and she never had any attention. She was ignored and forgotten. So as James continued to set up his camera, he seen her again. He decided to ignore her, which was a huge mistake. Instantly after that, James was gutted and stab multiple times, and decapitated. And no one heard his yelping and screaming. Soon Sarah got curios, and decided to check on the others. Also a mistake. There was a grown man, also know as Christopher, who was always alone. He once had a friend, but he had died. Christopher did not know this because of his disorder. He thought that his friend had left him. So now when people leave that floor, he thinks you are leaving him. She was hung from the wall and had slits all over her  wrist. Not to long later, It came down to only three people. Next was a young man named Zack. He was wondering around the floor holding his camera.He started to count how many rooms there were to pass time.He came across a room that was different, and had one large metal door with no windows. He turned the knob and slowly walked into the room. It was padded, and cold. As he walked through the room he noticed the the walls had writing on it. He looked at it closely  and it read “There is no way out”, He laughs at the remark. It got colder and colder, so he decided to go back and get his sweater. He turned and the door quickly shut right in front of him. He was stunned. He quickly reached for the knob and jerked it back and forth. It wasn’t opening. He looked behind him quickly and saw a dark mist. He screamed to the to of his lungs. He was scared to death. The next victim was A guy named Tommy. He was your average teenager who loved to joke around with people. Until the joke was on him. He was sitting on the ground talking into his camera until he heard something fall, and someone laugh. He thought it was one of the girls just trying to pull a prank on him. So he got up and walked around the floor acting surprised until he heard another noise. He started to get scared. He started to walk into the room the noise was coming from and when he walked in and died a slow and long death. There was once a little boy who loved to pull sick pranks on people. He though he was so funny until he started killing more and more people. They decided it would be best just to put him down. They came up with a machine that can kill him as fast as possible so he didn’t have to suffer but it went wrong when the machine shorted out it’s circuits, ad he died slowly and he suffered for hours. Next and last was Kim. She was just sitting there drifting off into sleep when she heard a loud bang. She quickly got up and started to search for the reason the noise went off.  She couldn’t find anything so she assumed it was a ghost. She started to tease the ghost. It was the last thing she would ever tease. The ghost’ name was Beth, and she was always made fun of and bullied, and one of the other children had beaten her to death. Kim was beaten to death. She was horribly slaughtered. The five people where found there, two weeks later.They could not find out how they died. 5 ears later another group of people went there. Never to return.

Credit To: Asia Jeanotte

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  1. Let me start off by saying that a ghost hunting trip to an abandoned mental institution isn’t exactly original. If you’re going to use an overdone cliche at least try to add something to it to make it your own story.

    My favorite line is “Soon Sarah got curios…”. Seems like an odd time to start picking up knick knacks. If you don’t understand what I mean google curios.

    It’s kind of funny how each person manages to do the one thing that will set the ghost off so it kills them e.g. ignoring it, teasing it and trying to leave it.

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  2. way too many villains, we only need one. trying to focus on all the different back stories for the ghosts was confusing. Having the characters introduced and then killed off in the same scene just highlights how much of a redshirt they all are.

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