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Though I am a fan of Creepypasta, this is Not fictional nor is it just a fan-fiction of an existing Creepypasta. However, I do have a feeling this might end up on the Crappypasta page but please, just hear me out.
Have you ever had the feeling like you’re being watched, but when you turn around, nothing is there? I feel like this 24/7. Ever since I could remember, my interests really differed from other kids my age. Even though I did have a ‘best friend’, I liked to spend most of my time indoors. I mean, yes I did like to play with other kids, but I wasn’t much of an ‘outdoor’ kind of 3-year old. Then, in 2005, right after my 6th birthday, mom told me that we had to move. At the time I didn’t completely understand it, but this wasn’t just a ‘few hours away’ type of thing. We moved from San Francisco all the way to Flushing Michigan. Not only that, to this day I am still not allowed to talk to anyone from California, which is where my father’s side of the family resides.
It took am extremely long time for me to adjust to the new surroundings. Not many other kids thought I was an interesting enough person to hang around with either. I also found myself staying with other people because my mom and step-dad were sick on a frequent basis. But this caused me to become dependent on those families and not my own. My mom caught onto this very quickly and those people whom I held so dearly to me, just suddenly disappeared without a word. This happened time and time again until I shut myself off from the rest of society, putting myself in complete and total isolation. Even now I still go by the motto “If you’re alone, then you won’t get hurt.” But even I wanted to be alone, and left alone..there was still something inside me that was begging for someone to just hold me because they wanted to. Not because they felt as though they had to.
Throughout this time period, I found myself talking to..well no one. At least, that’s what it looked like. It was a way of keeping my mind intact and keeping it from falling into the depths of chaos. Now I know you’re probably still thinking what this has to do with everything. Well, it’s because all those times I really wasn’t alone after all. Because I was so young and naïve, I wasn’t able to notice it ‘till now but there really was something there with me and listening to what I had to say.  Now if you’re a total Creepypasta Fan-Girl and/or Boy, the first thing that probably popped into your head was Slenderman. Well, you’re wrong.
A few years ago before my step-dad died, we moved into a more secluded area that was very quiet but wealthy. This is where I began to notice I wasn’t completely alone. My room is on the other side of the house far from the more social area. Plus, people where too afraid of me to come into my room. This is where I started to see things out of the corner of my eye. Your average shadows and scurries. I started to think the house was haunted. But then these mere black blurs started to look more like a figure. And now even my mom is starting to see it. But she’s probably the only one who has gotten a full view of what he looked like.
On my way back from school, as I walked into the door the alarm immediately went off. So, I rushed into the laundry room to turn it off. This was odd because she never turned on the alarm on a school day. Then she walked in and started explaining to me, in a slightly worried voice, why she had the alarm on. “At about 8 or 8:30 in the morning when I got up, I went into the kitchen to get something quick to eat before I went into the shower. Then I got the sudden strange feeling that someone was watching me. So I looked out one of the sliding glass doors and I could have sworn that I saw a man staring right back at me! He was crouching though so I couldn’t see his face. But it looked like he had…black shoes on. I think boots, and either black or a very dark blue pair of pants, and a hoodie. And the hood was up.” She didn’t tell me what color the hoodie was though. “He was hiding in the bushes, but I could still see enough. That’s when I turned the alarm on. At about 12 when I got out of the shower, I went back to the door to check to see if he was still there. But he wasn’t. He was much closer, he was sitting on that wooden chair type swing thing. His hood was still up and his head was down but he looked pale. I could see him sort of lift his head up so he knew that I was staring right at him. He also looked like he had rather long hair for a male. And I think it was black. That’s when I called our neighbors down the street. But when I turned around to look back at him, he was gone.”
This happened about 2 months ago. I’ve been starting to see this very man in the corner of my eye. I tried to count it off as me not getting enough sleep, but he was always there with me..always. Sometimes I could see him sort of peeking his head in through my closet, but when I shifted my eyes to look at him he quickly darted his head back. The same thing goes for around the house. Sometimes I could see his shadow move down the hall, sometimes I can see him scurry across the kitchen. And it’s not just the house it’s everywhere! I can here foot steps behind me when I walk through a trail to get to my bus stop. When on the bus I swear I can see him just standing there at a distance when the bus stops for other kids to get on. Even at school I think I see him slightly peering through the window next to the door in one of my classes. Finally I managed to get a good look at part of his face while he was looking into my science class.
But he didn’t move away like he normally did, he just stood there so he knew I could see him. I stared at him for a good 2 minutes before the teacher realized what I was doing. For 2 minutes this man didn’t blink. He didn’t blink or stop smiling. He gave a new meaning to the phrase “Smiling ear-to-ear.” Normally, people would flip their shit and freak out. But when I saw his face I got a strange comforting feeling..like I wasn’t alone in this. Slowly my fear started to fade away. I accepted his presence into my life. Slowly he got closer and closer to me. But not in a threatening type of way…Almost like he wanted me to know that he’s always been a part of my life, but he wasn’t here to hurt me intentionally.
“Mom? Who’s that?” I asked, picking up a semi-small framed picture from the top of the fire place mantle.
“Who’s who, dear?”
“Him,” I pointed to a dirty blond hair baby that my mom was cradling in her arms in the picture.
“Oh…,” she trailed off for a minute. “That’s your brother.”
“But Stephen has dark brown hair.” I told her in a questioning way.
“This is..,” she slowly took the picture from my hands. “This is the boy who was born 6 or 7 years after Stephen when I was very busy working. This is your long lost brother, Jeffery.” I could tell saying his name made her sad so I stared at her with a worried look. “You see, sweetie..This was also when your grandfather was still alive, and he didn’t like the idea of me having another child while I was still working so much, so he forced me to put him up for adoption right after he was born. But not before I could name him first.”
“Oh..”
“Hm..he should be about 11-14 by now…His adopted parents promised me that I would get visiting rights..but I have no idea what he even looks like now. They keep telling me that he wants nothing to do with me or you, Izzy.”
We had that conversation one year after we moved to Michigan. Jeffery has come up maybe once or twice since then. In his baby picture, he had dirty-blond hair and blue eyes, and his skin was slightly toned. I still don’t know what he looks like now because the lawyers kept saying he wanted nothing to do with us. I didn’t know at that time there was a possibility..that the reason was because he went missing. I can just barely remember hearing something about a serial killer that was on the loose somewhere in Illinois. But I was a kid, the news didn’t interest me that much.
After I had gotten through the whole ‘Slenderman Fan-girl’ phase, I tried reading other creepypastas. But I was listening to them on YouTube. The user I was listening to was SomeOrdinaryGamer who did Haunted Gamming and read from Creepypasta. The one that scared me the most was Jeff the Killer. When I saw his face, it scared me so much I actually started crying. And I kept crying every time I saw it. So I left it the fuck alone. But gradually my fear of him started going away, and it wasn’t because I was growing out of it. It was because he was there with me. Though I couldn’t see him, I just kept hearing the words ‘Everything will be alright’. So now it doesn’t scare me as much as it use to. Finally when I was kik talking with another Creepypasta Fan-Girl.
It hit me.
The possibility of Jeff being the same Jeff as my long lost brother didn’t come to me till then. The strange occurances started happening more and more. Every now and then I’ll even wake up with scars on my body. Things going missing, etc. The only thing violent this thing has done to me is this…Right when I’m exhausted..when I’m on the brink of falling asleep…I can’t move. I do mean this literally. My entire body goes numb and it’s so much of a struggle just to blink. Not only that, I can’t even open my mouth to talk. Not even whisper! The only thing I have the capability of doing is breathe rapidly..rapidly enough where the thought of sleep didn’t even come to me. This lasts about 30 seconds to a minute and it’s becoming more frequent now. I currently still have these episodes so it becomes exceedingly hard for me to fall asleep. If I’m lucky, I’ll get 45minutes – an hour in a half of sleep a night.
Even while typing this I can still see him peering through the door way and making noises in the closet. I also tried drawing him. But it came out like this;

It wasn’t until later did I add to that picture (Which is why it looks edited, you can see the unedited version on my photobucket account)
Do I still keep the possibility of my brother Jeffery and Creepypasta’s Jeff the Killer being the same person? Yes I do. Do I also keep the possibility of Jeff being this Demon like Guardian that’s been there listening and watching me all this time, and currently still is? I’m still debating. From what I’ve read, if Jeff didn’t like me, or want me posting this, he would have killed me by now. Now I know the admin who’s reading this is probably thinking this is another fan fiction of Jeff the Killer.
I promise you it’s not.

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  1. Now if you’re a total Creepypasta Fan-Girl and/or Boy, the first thing that probably popped into your head was Slenderman.

    Well, no. Not even remotely. Actually, I’d expected it to be about an original character. Or possibly ghosts. I suppose I’m just an optimist, or naïve.

    It’s a pity the pasta goes the way it did, because the beginning actually wasn’t too bad. (Outside of the very first paragraph, which is bad—pastas that actually go on about other Creepypastas or about Creepypastas in general and explicitly compare themselves to them are something of a pet peeve of mine.) And then it turns out to be about Jeff the Killer, and it all goes straight downhill and collapses in a huge pile of clichéd garbage. How unfortunate.

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    • But…..but…. it’s real. They promised and everything!

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    • Oh my God, the first thing I thought of when I read the ‘fangirl / boy’ comment was… hell no.
      I’m a fan of creepypasta, although I wouldn’t refer to myself as a fangirl because that word brings to mind obsessive qualities of fanaticism, but I digress…
      I think being a fan of creepypasta, for me, means checking the site every (or almost every) day for new submissions, browsing random pastas based on whatever title catches my eye, and reading even poorly rated pastas just to give it a chance and see where if I side with popular opinion.
      I’m beyond tired of Slenderman and Jeff the Killer. Slenderman when it originated, was original. There have been a few good contributions to the mythos on creepypasta, and of course if you really want to ‘fangirl’ you can watch the extensive Marble Hornets series on Youtube. I’ve watched up to Entry 40-something, but it has just gotten to the point that I’ve lost interest. Too much choppy camera movement and distortion, constantly having to adjust my volume due to changes in sound quality… And I know that’s part of the myth, that Slenderman causes malfunctions, and having only quick, brief shots of the -Man in question adds to the suspense, but eventual it’s like, “Damn, when am I gonna see some action?”
      Jeff the Killer, on the other hand, has a weak origin story and I haven’t really seen any pastas that did much to add to or improve it. Honestly though, it kind of makes me want to just sit down with pen and paper and come up with a kickass, convoluted story to end all Jeff the Killer stories — literally. Just create something so powerful that it completely changes the tone of the myth so that people stop writing shitty Jeff the Killer stories. Either that or serious authors might have renewed faith in the idea and do something of their own with it.
      I didn’t mean that to sound like I want to toot my own horn, but wouldn’t it be cool if someone wrote something about Jeff that was actually good? And since nobody seems up to it maybe I’ll give it a try sometime.
      Anyway, this pasta sucked. It was bland and majority of it seemed almost like an afterthought, not enough detail and a laughable ending. 3/10 for effort and a decent drawing.

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  2. ‘However, I do have a feeling this might end up on the Crappypasta page’ YOU’VE GOT THAT WRONG!

    ‘Now if you’re a total Creepypasta Fan-Girl and/or Boy, the first thing that probably popped into your head was Slenderman.’ YOU’VE STILL GOT THAT WRONG!

    ‘The possibility of Jeff being the same Jeff as my long lost brother didn’t come to me till then.’ HOLY SHIT HOW WRONG CAN YOU BE?!

    ‘Do I still keep the possibility of my brother Jeffery and Creepypasta’s Jeff the Killer being the same person? Yes I do.’ YOU’RE STILL FUCKING WRONG!

    ‘Now I know the admin who’s reading this is probably thinking this is another fan fiction of Jeff the Killer.
    I promise you it’s not.’ – HOLY SHIT YOU’RE FUCKING WRONG FUCK THIS SHITTY FANFIC OPERATOR OUT

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    • wait fuck i thought it said ‘might end up on the creepypasta page’, not ‘crappypasta page’.

      I’m so sorry, I fucked up. I’m trash.

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      • That’s rubbish and you know it. *3*

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        Slender is displeased of your failure. He hides… kind of behind a wall, or something, I guess…?

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      • ‘Now I know the admin who’s reading this is probably thinking this is another fan fiction of Jeff the Killer.
        I promise you it’s not.’

        YOU’VE GOT THAT WRONG!

        Kill the Killers.

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  3. YOU HAD POITNEAL!! You did! I kinda like the idea of a demon sorta guardian. I don’t know maybe it’s just me but, you ruined it. Your writing style wasn’t terrible in fact it’s good at some points. It was starting to feel like pasta poseur at the begging but, that ended to quickly for me to say it is pasta poseur. I was kinda liking it until you described your demon guardian.

    FUCKING GEOFF I hate you!!!! I think you have something here but, just get rid of Jeff. Your story is faker than some metephor that I can’t think of. You have some talent but, you just wasted.

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    • No, there was no “poitneal” at all.

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  4. Another misspelled title, therefore another pasta unworthy to read.

    Wait! There’s a picture! And it seems to be drawn on some sort of tracing paper. The game is afoot! I can only assume that this diabolical creature is 2-dimensional, and it held perfectly still while it was engaging in its voyeuristic exploits. Somehow, the author was able to place the paper on the monster’s face without disturbing its violent bloodlust, and then was able to etch its likeness for all the world to see.

    ‘effing remarkable.

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  5. Not going to lie, the drawing made it worse.

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  6. Dem evel killa came from de anime wold!!!!

    And the last paragraph last fuckin’ paragraph. It’s like stabbing a guy, standing there and telling him : “I didn’t stab you. I used a knife to damage your internal organs but that isn’t a stabbing!”

    -6/10. Of all turds, this one is the worst.

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  7. “Now if you’re a total Creepypasta Fan-Girl and/or Boy, the first thing that probably popped into your head was Slenderman.”

    This comment made me cringe more than anything else on this site…..

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  8. You are STILL a Creepypasta fangirl! Even worse, you are a Jeff the Killer fangirl doing the classic “LOL I LIEK HIM SO WERE TOTEZ RELAITED” Mary Sue nonsense. Don’t try and be all meta and claim this isn’t fanfiction when it so blatantly is.

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  9. “Though I am a fan of Creepypasta, this is Not fictional nor is it just a fan-fiction of an existing Creepypasta.”

    “The possibility of Jeff being the same Jeff as my long lost brother didn’t come to me till then”

    All I can say here is FAIL.

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  10. “However, I do have a feeling this might end up on the Crappypasta page but please, just hear me out.”

    Dude, you psychic??

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  11. Omg great story I really like it this was judged to harshly and no Jeff isn’t his brother because I am deadman Dan

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    • omg lolz bro that’s like so totes wanna be bffs? also like jk lolz and SHUT UP.

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  12. Jeff is your brother? It’s all… So obvious. I mean, I can see it now. Mr and Mrs Sue have three children… Of course one is going to be Jeff! Now, Stephen has to turn into Slenderman, And Izzy… welp I’m stuck.

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  13. FAIL WHALE!

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    VVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVV

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    • What!?

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    • you tried

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    • I almost bit my tongue off when I saw that. That was the most random thing I have ever seen.

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      • I guess it was supposed to be art, but it glitched out. I just did the same thing with my thumbs up above.

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  14. Oh look, another mary-sue fanficition with Jeff. How original. Now, besides being yet another Jeff fic, I have a lot wrong with this pasta.

    1. “Though I am a fan of Creepypasta, this is Not fictional nor is it just a fan-fiction of an existing Creepypasta. However, I do have a feeling this might end up on the Crappypasta page but please, just hear me out.” You mean non-fictional, and, if I can quote our very own The Operator, YOU’VE GOT THAT WRONG! This is a fanfiction, and no matter how much you say it isn’t, we all can see through your lie. Jeff is a FICTIONAL character. If somehow you can be related to a fictional character, or if you think you can be related to a fictional character, then I just give up with this world. I don’t want to live on this planet anymore. Oh, and at least you were right on the fact that it would end up on Crappypasta rather than creepypasta. Want to know why? We don’t need more fanficiton of Jeff, and this was pretty crappy compared to the pastas on the main site.
    2. “Throughout this time period, I found myself talking to..well no one. At least, that’s what it looked like. It was a way of keeping my mind intact and keeping it from falling into the depths of chaos. ” Now, at this point in the pasta, I am assuming you were 6. 6-year-olds do talk to thin air, or what appears to be nothing at all. They are called imaginary friends, and most kids have them. So, the whole keeping mind intact and falling into the chaos bullshit, yeah. No. You were 6. You were talking to an imaginary friend, which is completely normal for 6-year-olds to do. Plus, at age 6, a child’s mind really isn’t that developed so this falling into chaos thing doesn’t work.
    3. ” Now if you’re a total Creepypasta Fan-Girl and/or Boy, the first thing that probably popped into your head was Slenderman. Well, you’re wrong.” Oh, I am so sorry I don’t live up to your standards of being a “total creepypasta fan-girl”. I didn’t think of Slenderman. I thought of something that was actually good. Sure, I USED to like Slenderman, back when he was original and a good pasta monster. Now he is just a joke. So, please, don’t associate all of us “fan-girls” to liking something that has become a joke.
    4. “The possibility of Jeff being the same Jeff as my long lost brother didn’t come to me till then” Remember when I said you can’t be related to a fictional character, this is what I was talking about. I don’t want to live on this planet anymore. Done. So done here.
    5. Oh look a picture! Oh look, it’s an anime version of Jeff. If you were trying to convince us that you really are related to a fictional character, you should have drawn him in a realistic style. MAYBE we would have believed you then. Ha ha. What am I saying? No we wouldn’t. But seriously, drawing an anime picture of Jeff the Killer isn’t going to convince us, just make us laugh at your pitiful attempt to convince us that you are actually related to him. P.s. You should have just put the “unedited” version of the picture on your pasta, because the way you edited it, you completely butchered the picture. It looks terrible.
    6. On another note of the picture, if he was just standing there letting you draw him, why didn’t you just take a picture of him with a camera or something? If he was just going to stand there for you, a photo would have been better than your little anime drawing.
    7. Oh, and of course your title. Jeff the Killer is HUMAN! I can’t stress this enough. He isn’t some sort of demon. He is a human, like you and me….Well, not me. I am a potato. But stop trying to make him into something he isn’t. He is a human.

    This fanfiction made me want to puke. Author,I am taking away your hand privileges. Until you can come up with something original, and not this Jeff the Killer bullshit, you lose your hand privileges. Potato is not pleased with this pasta, at all.

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    • I read your comment in a fast,ranting voice.It was epic.Horrible pa-wait,this isn’t even a pasta.It’s just a failed fanfic story thing wha.tever-the -fuck.Love your comments ,potato.

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  15. I skipped all the inane backstory and bitching about how your life sucks. JUST SAYIN’!
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    So… she could see his shoes while he was crouched, but couldn’t take a good look at him… Okay.
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    Oh my God! You are hunted by a real life anime! THE HORROR!!!

    Seriously, this one was LAAAME! There are so many things wrong with this one. Just… just stop… Don’t re-write this, improve your English and try writting more natural dialogue. Half the time I thought your mother was a computer.
    P.S. *Guardian Demon. Unless he’s made out of gaurds, which I find unlikely.

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  16. I don’t know why everyone hates this other than it having KtJ in it, I personally think the concept of a gaurdian demon is interesting because of how terrifying a demon made of gourds would be.

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  17. Hey guys, you know what I love? People who claim that their narratives are “true stories”, and still (attempt) post them on the main site.

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