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Ice Cold Cory

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Today was very cold. So I decided to find the nearest house and ask if I could stay there for a while I was freezing over.
So I found one after a while.
It looked like a normal house…   Except it was in the middle of the woods.
I looked around and there was no sign of anything else being frozen or cold, there was nothing.
I must be ill or something. I knocked on the door but there was no answer.
I tryed to open the door and to my suprise it fell to the ground and there was a loud thump.
And it began to snow. I called out “Hello! any one home?” no answer. I looked around.
But after looking around the perfectly normal looking home I decided I would try and fix the door before to much
snow got in. I turned towards the door only to find that the door was frozen back in place.
Terrified I ran to the door and tryed to open it suddenly the room became extremely cold I turned around to see a man
standing infront of me. His eye glowed light blue. He stared at me.
I opend my mouth to say something but before I could the man spoke in the deepest voice I heard in my life
“To cold are you?” and pulled out
a long knife what scared me even more was the fact the man now looked angry and the air around him starting freezing.
The knife looked like it was made of ice… No wait it is.
The man skin began to become pale “Because i’m even colder” and he smiled and laughed he stabbed the knife at me at an
extremely fast speed. blood went everywere but it turned blue as soon as it hit something.

There once was a kid who spent most of his time on the computer had little to no friends but still enjoyed his life as much
as everyone else did. The only time he would go out is when he had school he was like this untill he reached the age of 14
when he starting to go out ONLY when it was cold.
He liked the cold weather more then he liked playing computer games and one day he fell off a wall he was climbing and he
broke his spine but it was so cold it frozen back into place and he got up he felt a weird feeling in his eyes.
He went home and decided that he would never go
outisde again. And he rememberd that his spine was frozen and the heating was on but realised
that his whole body was freezing even though the whole room was really hot.
Someone called out “Cory!?” he replied “Yes dad?” and then he felt the the feeling in his eyes again. There was another
call “Come help” Cory looked at the mirror he had in the room and his eyes glowed light blue. But he didn’t seem to care.
so he walked out to the kitchen.
his farther was holding up something to the wall he said “Cory pass me that nail” so he did and then looked at the knife at
the other side of the room.
His dad wasn’t watching Cory or behind him so Cory walked to the knife and grabbed it.
He walked towards his dad with the knife behind his back and kicked the ladder that he was standing on and with super fast
speed, shot his hand out with his knife. He had stabbed his dad in the head.
He walked out of the house with his knife and it started snowing.
He looked at his cloths he had a grey hoodie and green cargo trousers on he also had a hat on he threw his hat on the
ground and put his hood up “I’m well known for wearing my hat all the time” He said with a deep voice that shocked him.
He noticed the blood but something strange about it.
The blood had started turning blue.
Walking out of his street he decided his new area of living and looked up to the woods.
“Perfect” he felt an sharp pain when he said that he shouted “WHAT THE FUCK!” His voice became very deep now.
Suprised he dropped his knife and it shatterd.
He picked it back up and it frozen together again “Why has my voice changed so fast and so deep? and why has my knife just
frozen itself together again?”.
He laughed and saw someone looking at him. The man stood there shivering, as Cory came closer to him and said…
“To cold are you?” the man stepped backwards “Because i’m even colder” Cory threw himself at the man with extreme speed
and stabbed the man in his heart and blood rushed out.
Cory left the man there and walked into the woods and ran the way to the home that had been abandoned for 7 years.

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6 Comments

  1. You nearly lost me at: “the knife looked like it WAS made of ice… No wait it IS”you can’t change tense mid-sentence.

    Also it would help if Cory’s catchphrase made sense… To cold are you? Did you mean: Too cold, are you? That would make more sense.

    However the fact that he has a catchphrase at all highlights the bigger issue, you are trying to create the next big monster, instead of actually just having a good idea, writing a story and having it become popular on its own.

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  2. (Oh, look, another particularly cliched jeff-clone. Let’s have CDA mock it, shall we?
    NOTE: For those of you people just joining, CDA is a satirical slender ‘pasta’ about two police officers who must commit mass genocide on bad crappypasta authors in order to stop the Slender Man from rising to power.
    Part 1 is here – http://www.crappypasta.com/slendermans-games/
    Part 2 is here – http://www.crappypasta.com/a-tale-of-torture/
    Enjoy.)

    “…And you’re saying that this isn’t the work of slendy.”

    “‘Slendy’ doesn’t go around showing random people his stabs. ‘Slendy’ doesn’t stab anyone. Period.”

    Dell looked down at the dead body, blood everywhere. “Okay. So… who killed this guy?”

    Sighing, Charlie spelt out the situation. “More people writing about slender means more slenderman. More slenderman means more insane people, more insane people means more crazy fucking serial killers. Comprehende?”

    “Oh. Shit.” Dell shivered – partly from the cold atmosphere, partly from the situation. “We could be facing a global crisis of, as you said, crazy fucking serial killers if we don’t hurry.” Still slightly confused, she pointed at the iced-over footprints. “But… how does the frozen footprints work with serial killers?”

    “Tall dark and slender is some kind of eldritch god, it wouldn’t be too suprising if he could turn people into evil ice men or some shit.”

    “So? In that case, don’t we really have to stop him?”

    A few seconds went by before Charlie finally thought of a one liner.

    “He’ll melt.”

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  3. You suck get a life and keep it because when I say this next comment I bet everyone means it too ‘THIS IS FUCKING RETARDED’

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  4. Wow I’m I. Sixth grade and I could write better than this no offense but this could have used more work Cory could’ve been so much creepier and his catch phrase had me totally lost

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  5. This isn’t even coherent enough for me to be able to critique it properly. Things just happen one after the other with seemingly no cause, which should never be the case. The cause of a haunting or a monster in a creepy pasta might be shrouded in mystery, but one should always get the sense that there *is* a cause. Why does he go from normal to having glowing eyes and bloodlust? Just because. Why does his voice deepen and his knife re-form? Again, just because.
    This is just throwing some stuff together and hoping it will be scary.

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