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In the distance

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I was strolling through the woods like usual. I had taken my dog with me. Me and my dog were the only living things in sight. There was a slight fog and an owl hooted behind me somewhere. There were multiple reports of missing children lately and all of them unsolved. The police were baffled. So far eight children were reported missing. The fog was getting thicker. Suddenly my dog stopped and sniffed the air. Then he turned east and started barking like mad. I had never seen him like this before. I finally gave in and my dog ran off barking. Now the fog was so thick I couldn’t see three feet in front of me. Then I heard my dog yip as if he was struck. Then silence. And silence. And silence. Then rushing footsteps approached rapidly, braking twigs and branches along the way. I spun on my heel and ran west. I didn’t want to know what was chasing me. My breathing started to get faster and my legs strayed to hurt. I stumbled and fell on my face. A rock jamming into my leg as I cry out in pain. I look up expecting a hideous monster beyond comparision to show up but is was only my dog. He had a several long thin scarpes about fingers breadth apart. In the distance I thought I saw a figure standing there,just watching us, staring and not moving. But when I blinked it was gone. I figured it was just my eyes playing tricks on me. A couple minutes after I saw the figure I headed sounds. Not natural sounds, but whispering. Whispering in a foreign tongue. It was hard to tell. Greek,Latin,Roman, I didn’t know. But all I could think of was why could I hear whispering in the middle of the woods. I turned around and was terrified with the sight I beheld. The man, no monster, I saw in the distance was right behind me. It had lengthy arms and legs, and an unnatural slim body. But probably most disturbing, was its lack of a face. I couldn’t see no eyes, but could tell it was staring at me. The next thing I saw next was it unfold hidden tentacles with a scream and blackness,from the thing in the distance.
Credit To – noisyacorns

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9 Comments

  1. Latin and Roman, eh? Smh.

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  2. God damnit, I almost want someone to write a new cliche monster just so Slenderman will go away. I don’t want him entirely gone, I just want people to stop revering him as cruise control for creepy.

    I will admit I used him to play a minor role in my pasta, which I decided to leave in the edited version that I haven’t sent to Derpbutt yet. But I put a lot of thought into how I was going to use him,

    In other news, Derpbutt, what is your policy on submitting edits during closed submission periods? I forgot to send them to you while submissions were open and with the new submission rules I want to ask before I send them.

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    • For pastas that are accepted and published on the main site ONLY, you can send edits directly to the email address you got the acceptance mail from whenever – closed or open. It’s easiest for me if you just send it as a reply to the acceptance email.

      Edits of crappypastas or otherwise rejected stuff have to wait for open submission periods. Trying to send in a rewrite of a rejected or crappypasta-posted submission during a closed period will end up with it deleted.

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  3. As soon as I have read the word “woods” I knew this was another slenderpasta… -.-’

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    • “The man, no monster, I saw in the distance was right behind me.”

      If he’s in the distance, how is he right behind you…? Just something to think about.

      “The next thing I saw next was it unfold hidden tentacles with a scream and blackness,from the thing in the distance.”

      First of all, so many grammatical mistakes. Second, you put ‘next’ twice, and it made it sound kind of… Eh, worse. And third: Earlier in the pasta, you said it was in the distance, but then contradicted and right after that said it was right behind you. Hmm… Now it’s back in the distance.

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  4. I hate to be and ahole but it has WAY too many cliches and kinda falls off the realistic factor when he saw the slenderman, half decent for a first try, but still sucks 1/10 :(

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  5. This was my first try as disturbed said,but I made it on my kindle because I had nothing else to do and was waiting for someone to show up. I would’ve made it better if I was on my computer instead. But thanks for the advice.

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    • …veering dangerously close to admitting to wasting my time, there. I suggest you re-read the FAQ before you submit again (or leave any more comments).

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  6. “Me and my dog were the only living things in sight. There was a slight fog and an owl hooted behind me,”

    nice work contradicting yourself in the space of two lines.

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