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Jeff the killer and Smile dog vs the Herobrine

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There was a boy called John Williams. he just bought Minecraft on his computer and he opened it up, he was faced with the Minecraft title screen, then he clicked single player, he called the world John’s world for a starting name for his first world. He put in bonus chest and no cheats and he made the world default. He spawned in the world and he looked around. He was apparently in a forest biome but the trees were very tall and the ground was made of nether rack. “This is a weird world” he thought. But he decided to play with the world anyway. He found the bonus chest nearby, it had a signed book that was named, note one. He opened the book and read the first page. “Hide or he will find you” it said.
This made John a little uneasy at first but he soon laughed it off. He made a house out of wood planks and nether rack for the roof. For a few hours in playing, he played well. A little later though he felt uneasy again, then he heard a chest open and close behind him. He turned around and found a chest that wasn’t there before he opened it and he found another book that said note two. He opened it and it said, “This is your last warning hide or he will find you.” John felt scared now he decided to stop playing for a while. So he paused the game but didn’t click save and quit, and he set his computer to sleep mode. After a few hours of doing stuff in his house, he ate dinner and went to sleep. Big mistake.
At about 2:00am he woke up and felt thirsty. So he went to the kitchen to get a drink. His computer was in the living room which was between his kitchen and his bedroom he walked out of his bedroom and into the living room. He felt a chill of cold air and shivered. He thought he would turn on the radiator to warm himself up. But it was on full heat and he still felt cold. then he noticed that his computer was on again to the pause menu of Minecraft. He thought it would just turn of any way to stop it from overheating. So he went to the kitchen and poured himself a drink of water. after drinking it he walked back into the living room and looked at his computer screen it was looking at an open book in Minecraft called note three. It said “I gave you a fair warning now he is here”. John felt the cold run through him again and he felt terrified. He ran back into his room jumped into his bed and tried to go to sleep but he couldn’t he shut his eyes tight but he could not get warm enough. Then he decided that it was just his imagination and put the covers over his feet then he felt much warmer.
When he closed his eyes, he could hear his bedroom door open and close then he heard footsteps walking towards him. He rolled over to have a look, and saw what he had not expected. A man with a cyan t shirt, dark blue jeans, grey sneakers, but what was noticeable was his eyes. His eyes were empty, no pupils in them, just white glowing empty eyes. “Who are you” asked John. The man gave him an odd look as if he thought John said something weird. The man walked towards him and grabbed him by the neck! He leaned his face right up to John’s. Then he spoke with an echoing voice, “my name is Herobrine”. And then the man snapped John’s neck. And John passed away.

A few nights later. Who was once a thirteen year old boy, now is a cold blooded psychopath, Jeff the killer had emerged from the darkness of the trees. He was holding a bottle of wine and he kept on gulping at it. After the extreme events that happened on the night when Jeff killed his family, Jeff had become a drunken killing machine. Jeff walked down the street to the pub. He walked in and sat down on a chair on the far end of the counter. “What would you like mate” said the bar keeper. “A beer please” said Jeff. Jeff had smashed his bottle on his way to pub. The Bar keeper gave him a glass of beer. Jeff put his hand in his right pocket, he felt his knife. Then he felt as if he was being watched.
The phone rang and the bar keeper picked it up. “Year, right I’ll see if he’s in. Hay is there a Jeff here?! Jeff put his hand up and took the phone. “Hello?” a whispering voice answered. “Meet me behind the bar when you come out. Or else.” “Who is this?!” said Jeff. But whoever it was hung up.
After Jeff had finished his beer, he went outside. He stopped and thought for a moment. He remembered the man on the phone who asked to meet him. Jeff got the feeling that he felt for a long time, insanity. He decided that he would kill this person instead. So he went behind the bar. He waited there for a while, for what felt like forever. Then he got the feeling that he was being watched again. He turned around to look into an alley way. What he saw were two eyes staring back at him reflecting of some unknown light. They seemed to have eyelids and they blink now and again but the eyes had no pupils. The figure stepped out of the alley, into the light. He was wearing a cloak with a hood along with a cyan t shirt, dark blue jeans and grey sneakers. Jeff stared at this man for a few minutes and then asked him “who are you!?” the man took of his hood and said “my name is herobrine.” Jeff pulled out his knife and slowly walked towards him. “Why did you want to see me?!” herobrine shrugged. “WHY… WHY?! I’ll tell you why, I hate people who do my job for me. I hunt those who believe I’m fake. I want revenge on all humanity for those who tried to remove me from life. And I love three things, pain, suffering, and death.” Jeff knew at this point that this man wanted to kill him. So Jeff jumped at him and stabbed him in the shoulder. Herobrine went down with a thud screaming. Jeff laughed and stabbed him in his guts and blood went everywhere. Herobrine broke free of the pain and swung something at Jeff. It hit Jeff in the head hard and Jeff fell off the psychotic ghostly figure. Jeff looked up and saw that herobrine had a menacing looking hoe. Jeff threw his knife at Herobrine’s legs and herobrine fell down onto the ground hard. Jeff stood up and grabbed his knife. “Is that the best you got herobrine?!” then herobrine liked up at Jeff and Jeff noticed something. Herobrine’s eyes were no longer white. They were red. Herobrine opened his mouth and Jeff saw a row of white glowing long jagged fangs. Herobrine leaped towards Jeff and herobrine bit one of the legs, Jeff fell to the ground and laughed manically. Herobrine crawled up Jeff’s body and put his hands on Jeff’s shoulders. Herobrine let out a mighty raw and started to punch Jeff in the face until Jeff coughed out blood then Jeff gripped his Knife and stabbed it in Herobrine’s leg. Herobrine screamed like a ghoul and fell off Jeff herobrine quickly broke free of the pain and grabbed his hoe and swung it at Jeff. Jeff ducked and herobrine kept on swinging at him until Jeff stabbed him in the heart. Herobrine laughed. “Do you really think that would kill me?! I can’t die!”
Jeff found out that this herobrine was not alive. Jeff ran as fast as he could without stopping, knowing that he couldn’t fight whatever he was facing. Jeff kept on running and running. Then Jeff looked back still running. Jeff saw a horrific sight. Herobrine was chasing after him on all fours, eyes still red, and his white jagged fangs which are now stained red, and the worst part was that Herobrine was catching up fast. Jeff saw a well nearby and he ran to it. He dived strait in and Herobrine followed. Jeff found himself getting smashed about by the walls as if the place kept changing its artificial gravity over and over again. Jeff then saw another well above him. Jeff shot strait out of the top and landed on the soil ground.
Jeff was home, in the under realm. Jeff knew that Herobrine would not be far behind so Jeff ran he could see his house up ahead. Jeff went into full sprint until he grabbed his door knob and twisted. But it was locked. Jeff then remembered that he hid the key under a fake rock. Jeff picked up the rock and took the key. Then Jeff looked back along the road. And saw Herobrine sprinting on all fours strait towards him. Jeff tried the key but before he could unlock the door Jeff felt something grab his hair and pulled. Jeff flew back and smashed through the fence of his back yard. Jeff found himself pinned to the ground by Herobrine’s own hands. Then herobrine finally spoke. “SO THIS IS THE FAMOUS JEFF THE KILLER I’M NOT IMPRESSED BECAUSE I HAVE BEATEN WORSE THEN THIS!” then Herobrine lifted his hoe from his belt and before he could stab the blade into Jeff. Herobrine felt a vicious bite sing into his leg as he fell off Jeff. Herobrine looked down and saw something he was amazed and discussed with. He saw the infamous Smile dog bitting his leg. Herobrine grabbed his hoe and stabbed smile dog in the side and he let go of his leg. Herobrine stood up and looked at the master and the pet. Jeff spoke coughing up blood. “Glad you could join in smile.” Smile dog’s grin grew wider “glad to be of assistance master.
Herobrine stared at smile dog and then looked up at Jeff “no one told me you had friends.” Herobrine swung his hoe at smile dog and smile dog jumped at him and knocked him over. Jeff watched as smile dog slowly bit into Herobrine’s neck. Herobrine tried to get up but as he did so he felt his head come loose. His head fell to the ground with a thud. Jeff looked at Herobrine’s dead corpse. Then he decided that smile dog and him will tell the whole thing to the slender man.
Jeff told the whole thing to Slendy. “Let me see his corpse.” he said. But when they got there Herobrine was nowhere to be found. Then they heard movement behind them. They all turned around, to see him run off on all fours into the distance, with his black cloak floating in the wind.
Jeff shrugged “I guess he was to wide awake to… GO TO SLEEP!”

Credit To – doctorironstar
Credit Link – http://www.youtube.com/user/doctorironstar

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  1. “There was a boy called John Williams.”
    Why is the composer from Star Wars and Indiana jones in this?

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    • I was the only picking a random name. I didn’t realise it was acually the john williams you were thinking about.

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      • What so you wrote it and you accidentally put in a real (very) famous person? Surely there can be more than one person called John Williams. They’re both pretty common names.

        You’re actually an idiot aren’t you?

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        • My comment appears to be rather vague. It was a dig at the op not Bravo.

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        • I really felt quite sad you would call someone with a disability an idiot. He is trying his best and he has improved a lot.

          Your comment made me want to cry.

          I for one am proud he is trying. I am his mother.

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          • I have some advice for you ‘Mother’. Make your kid get out more and make sure he doesn’t write anything else. It would make all of our lives easier. You want us to stop being critics, too? This is a criticism site though, so sorry, but we can’t.

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          • I have to disagree – telling people to ‘stop writing’ goes against the entire point of this website. He just needs to practice and take the criticisms here and apply them to his writing. If everyone who didn’t produce perfection on their first try gave up, nothing would ever be created.

            That said, if you really are his mother and you feel this website is detrimental to his mental health, perhaps you should not allow him to submit to us with the crappypasta option checked. It’s not mandatory and I do warn people beforehand that they’re in for harsh criticism if they do select that option. Please view the FAQ on the main site to get a better idea of how things work around here.

            Further, there’s absolutely no way for the people here to know the mental state of people who submit these things; it’s a bit ridiculous to imply that they should somehow be aware of the details of a random stranger’s life. Attacking people because you felt they should have buffered their criticism based on facts unknown to them makes absolutely no sense, I’m sorry.

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          • Well, he tried his best, and that’s useful, but the thing is, this is not a site for critiquing in general. There are many other sites for that. If he had a mental disorder (I, by the way, have one as well), maybe he shouldn’t have released his story out onto the internet straight away? Could you have helped him out? If he wanted, he could have chosen to not click the ‘submit to crappypasta’ option.

            Anyway, let me give him a bit of constructive criticism.

            Maybe he should attempt to write his own original character? Herobrine, Jeff the Killer, and Smile Dog have all been used many, many times – it’s seeing the same thing over and over again. There are literally over hundreds of pastas about these things on this site, and we’re all sick of them. He should try to make up his own original monster! Get creative!

            I’m sorry for the criticism, but this is the internet. In a sense, he got lucky – there are sites that could have been much worse to him.

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          • Yeah, you’re right, derp. I was just in a bad mood that day. Anyway, mother (if you really are), if he has a mental disability, help him out! Check over the story for grammar, spelling, etc. Also, talk with him about (like Operator said) an original, creative idea. If you can’t help him, well, you might have to make him try another hobby. But definitely keep trying if you can help!

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          • don’t worry about me I don’t have a mental problem but i’m only 15, besides this was only the pilot to to a story called pasta monsters: the resurrection of Jane the killer

            and I am making up my own monsters like blake ebony black and the painter.

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          • Wait, you’re ‘only 15′?

            Psst.

            Buddy.

            I’m 15.

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          • Operator, there’s no way you’re only 15. I refuse to believe it. I’m just gonna keep imagining you as an elderly man, smoking a pipe at his computer and thinking up witty comments all day.

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        • NO I’M 15 AND THIS WAS WRITTEN WHEN I WAS 13 SO DON’T CALL ME AN IDIOT PLEASE!?

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          • He says in all caps.

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  2. I’m sure it’s missing something.
    Ah, right.

    To have a legit towo x two pokemon battle, there must be one more character that teams up with herobrine, for example, the most original and not overused one – slenderman.

    0/10.

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  3. Just reading the title gives me a server migraine. I didn’t even have to read it to tell this would ruin my day.

    -10/10

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    • please don’t tell me to commit suicide on my channel, i’m only 15 and that was my first story (besides what did i do to you to hurt you? i would like to know)

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      • I don’t think I said that, but if someone’s already advocating the idea…….

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        • what do you mean by that?

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        • guys I’m sorry I wrote this story. I realize that the grammar is not that good and the editing isn’t good either. the reason is that I was only 13 when I posted all my stories and they were my first attempt at writing stories. I will take your advise and make a story about my own monster and I will not post it until I’m happy with it.

          (this story is based off a comic in deviantart.com by XcomickittyX

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  4. Now this is just pushing it.

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  5. I looked at the title and immediately thought, “Oh for the love of God and all that is holy, no no NO!”

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  6. Jeff and Dog and Minecraft . . . OH MY!

    It’s like the unholy trinity of crappypasta was dumped into a blender, set for puree, and then poured into hollowed-out dog turds before being served at a banquet for the literary challenged.

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  7. *throws up*

    My Lord, what.. who.. why would you do this? Why?

    Creepypasta is not for fanfiction! STOP!

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  8. Just… WHY?

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  9. I just want to offer my condolences to everyone who was able to read this thing past the title.

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  10. … THIS IS COMPLETE BULLSHIT! WHY IS SLENDERMAN ALWAYS MY BOSS IN THESE STORIES?

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    • Aww, is tha widdle Jeffy-weffy angwee? Well guess what. Jeff wasn’t good in the first place,so stop trying to copy him. Now, go on. Shoo.

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  11. Got as far as; “There was a boy called John Williams. he just bought Minecraft.”

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  12. Very well done! I am so very impressed with your determination and development writing regardless of having disabilities that prevent you from having the same opportunities as regular people without. I am so proud of you and proud to be your mother.

    I hope people on this site learn to be a little less vicious in their critic in future.

    Well done son, please keep writing, I really enjoyed it.

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    • I read it. But why is smile dog jeffs slave? It makes no sense whatsoever and also why does herobrine have a cape? Why is it that every one of these types of things i read always drag slenerman in? AND WHY IS HERE.

      And a side note to your mother; Please stop. We want no more of this, so stop routing for him. Please.

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    • If you truly are his Mother (which I somewhat doubt) then I do apologise if I have been harsh.

      If you had bothered to look at the comment section on both this site and the main site you’d notice that they’re probably unsuitable for a young boy with a mental health disorder. In order for his work to be here you have to tick a box that allows it to be posted to crappypasta. Let’s face it, “crappypasta” doesn’t exactly scream unicorns and rainbows.

      There are plenty of sites where the story your son wrote are the norm. This isn’t one of them. Look for a fanfiction site where he won’t recieve the harsh criticisms that most authors face when their work ends up here.

      You cannot berate us for an error that you made. You also cannot try and make us feel guilty about a medical condition that we were not aware of when the comments were posted.

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  13. Ah yes, Herobrine’s menacing-looking hoes.

    Beware of double meanings.

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  14. So as it turns out, the writing for this vomit-siphoning ballfest wasn’t *too* terrible; the thing that made it so terrible was more the usage of four of creepypasta’s most hated characters. With that being said, I want to point out that the actual use of English wasn’t terrible, but it wasn’t exactly good either. I would suggest attending some creative writing seminars for inspiration in terms of plotlines, and maybe taking some writing courses to learn about different parts of speech and punctuation.

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  15. Derpbutt, you created this pasta. Notice the name of the cite. Yes, and your user all over. Your comment was all spelled right and such, and would make a good story if you used large words and grammar as you used in the comment. Think it is funny? Well, this junk making is not funny as you think, because the comment was better then some of your stories, it made sense and it had wonderful grammar as I said. So, please start writing your stories more like your serious comments-not your sloppy stories, just make the creepypastas creepier then comments.

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    • You’ve clearly put some thought into this. If you’d be so kind:

      I’m interested to hear why you think this might be happening. What do you think my motivations are? What do you think explains my wildly oscillating grasp of language?

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      • Yeah, Derp! You got some ‘splaining to do!

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        • I really want to know how people have justified this particular belief, though. Do I have an evil twin? A multiple system to explain why I talk to myself? What do you have to believe about me to allow the idea of my writing every single Crappypasta ever to make any sort of sense?

          I always ask, but nobody ever answers!

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      • It’s easier to imagine one guy writing horrible pastas on propose than a legion of morons, fanfic fuck wits, and brain dead trolls writing them. What makes it worse is that some were actually serous attempts.

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    • Hello Cam. I agree with you! Look at any pasta and I guarantee you that Derp posted it. I am extremely ignorant too.

      I am absolutely astonished that you do not appear to have the brain power to figure out what may have occurred here. Do you really think a troll of that level (posted every pasta on the site) would still be allowed to post here?

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  16. The crappy singularity. The only thing it’s missing now are pony pastas, pokepastas and a ‘YOU’RE NEXT’ ending.

    Kill the Killers, by the way.

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  17. Very interesting. This is just like creepypasta vs creepypasta. And also I love this story. I’ve got an idea for making Creepypasta stories like this.

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    • Please don’t write creepypastas like this. If you want to write a creepypasta, come up with something original. Don’t use clichéd, overused, regurgitated pasta.

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    • be my guest. I would love to see you stories. you seem to be the only one who has written a good comment

      your name is going in my note book so i never forget you!

      thank you so much DemonRedRed this means everything to me!

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  18. -Wild Smile dog and Jeff the Killer appears-
    -Author sends out Herobrine-
    -Herobrine dies-
    Author: FUUUUUUUUUUUU

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  19. My question is why? Why would anyone make something this bad? You really had to mix some of the most overused monsters of all time? Why??!! *huddles in a corner*

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  20. i liked it when smile dog just joind the fight.

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  21. With this title you just know the pasta is going to be a winner.

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