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Long distance call

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1:53 Am

My mobile rings and wakes me up. Aggravated, and pondering what idiot was calling me so early – probably some drunk twerp with the wrong number – I pick up my phone to see who’s calling me.

My daughter’s number. I sit up, perplexed, and try to conjure an explanation. But a pang of worry hits me. I’ve seen too many movies involving these situations, and I quickly become paranoid.

Thinking logically – No one, in their right mind, would call at this hour. If, for example, someone had found a misplaced phone, and was /sensible/ enough to want to return it, they’d surely be calling at a /sensible/ time.

I slip my mobile into my bed-short’s back pocket, meanwhile hastily making my way downstairs and towards her room, partying a baseball bat on the way –  just in case. My hand lands on the handle and I hesitate for no longer than a second as I barge into her room.

She’s in bed, sleeping peacefully. Nothing /seems/ out of place.

Her serene expression comforts my scattered thoughts and calms my racing heart. But seconds later, my mobile rings again. I quickly reach for it and answer in a hushed but clearly angered tone, ”Who is this??”

And from the other line my daughter’s voice answers clear as day;

”Hello, Daddy! I’m Dead!”
Credit To – GK
Credit Link - 111111111111111@inbox.com

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3 Comments

  1. This has potential, but needs one of two things:

    1. Somehow milk things out, add more creepyness, with the dead daughter being the final bang.

    2. Keep this relatively intact, and go from there in any number of directions.

    Good luck if you choose to resubmit, I like the concept :)

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  2. This should have been a crash It started out good but then crashed and burned. Maybe GK rewrite and change the ending.

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  3. Hi!! It’s That One Invisible Kid, remember me from the Hetalia creepypasta? Anyhoo, this was really good!!

    Can I ask where you got the idea? The story was interesting and, once again, well worded. Thanks for reading (And responding…?)!!

    ~That One Invisible Kid

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