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Madara Uchiha Watches Me Sleep

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Sleep was never easy for me,even as an infant my time away from the world would always be disturbed. See,because of this lack of sleep,i’m a really cranky guy. All ways snapping at people, never going to any social events, staying in like a hermit, just a really boring person who people would never accept. Though i don’t like being myself. I actually hate myself, suicide has been running through my thoughts for a long time now and i have executed it, but try to imagine how that went. It wasn’t because of i would miss life or anything,oh no,it was because of someone stopping me.

Madara Uchiha. Madara is the bane of my existance. He is responsible for the lack of rest and the lack of my life. Every night i wake up and and sometimes surrounded by his thick, sharp hair, suffocating me as i stare into his glowing purple rinnegan. Though that’s sometimes,it depends on what moods he’s in. Sometimes he just likes to look over me at the bottom of my bed or in some rare and holy cases he never even shows up. They are the nights in which i’m merry. But going back to every other night, he talks to me until i eventually pass out and wake up half an hour later to get up for work. The subject of conversation though is just him bashing my ego, making me hate myself more and more every night.

He stares at me with his erotic ovals, crossed arms, concerned expression as he lectures on about my “worthless” existance.
“You go to work everyday expecting to get that promotion from dean,but do you really think someone of his possision would give someone of your pathetic worth the even tiny glimmer of proggesion? You are nothing, i don’t even see why i tell you this because you know full well yourself. That’s why your parents died, that’s why you never got that kiss at prom, that’s why your stuck in a dead end job, that’s why-”
Madara ceesed his insultes as i got myself up from bed.

“You’ve been coming to me every night since i was young, giving me all of this talk on how i’m worth nothing, but look at you! What are you? A figment of my imagination? WHAT CAN YOU ACHIEVE? YOU ARE THE ONE WHO’S NOTHING.”

Madaras eyes had suddenly become red with three black totems surrounding the crimson oval. With looking into his eyes, the pitch black room that surrounded me had become distorted, changing its form as it transformed into a fairly lit chamber. The room was small, only having bland sandy walls give it what colour this room could get. The uchiha crest was also present on every wall. I suddenly felt a almost siesmac force push onto my neck, Madara had swooped down from the ceiling as he begun to push his black glove onto my adams apple. I fell down with tremendous force, with all air escaping my body, making me into an airless body bag. Madara glared at me with his blood filled sharingan eyes, pushing into my throut pipe as his eyes pushed into my fear.

“Listen to me you scum, i’ve been there for you since you were a child, i have been your friend from the very begining. I am the one who kept you alive when your family had died, remember that? No of course you don’t. Youth are so oblivious to what people actually do for them.”

I gasp in air-
“Then why do you hate me? Why do you frequntley push me down? Why can’t i make friends or have love? WHY CAN’T I BE NORMAL? WHY CAN’T I-”

Madara gets right up into my face.
“Hatred is born to protect love.”

My expression turns into confusion as his statement echos into my ear drums, but before i could ask him about what he said, i woke up.

It’s been three months since that has happened and three months since i’ve seen Madara. In those three months a lot has changed:I finally got that promotion, i’ve started to make friends, women have started to take notice of me, i’ve started to go parties with my new friends, basically i’ve got the life which i’ve wanted since well forever. I refelct of what madara told me and i sort of understand, i mean he gave me all of that negative advice because he knew i would eventually question his actions. Madara is not a bad person, he is in fact my maker..i mean with what he said, i wouldn’t be here now. Sure i had a fucking terrible past life, but that’s in the past, just like in the lion king the past can hurt but you can either run from it or learn from it, another thing which i had the joy to experiancing in these three months. Perhaps i’m not the only one, maybe Madara is out their doing the same or has done the same to other people, coming from nothing to being something. Though what love was he trying to protect? I can question all i want, but there’s no need, because i’m happy and that’s what i want. I’m writing this not as a creppypasta but a message to people, i’m woundering if anyone else has encountered Madara, if so, what had he done to you?
Credit To – Callum Thomas
Credit Link – Youtube-MrWrenchty1 (only for messaging only,i have no video content worth watching XD)

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  1. I had to look up who Madara Uchiha was.

    I still have no clue what this pasta is about.

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    • I made this story a long time ago,it’s been months since I’ve wrote it and I just got the confermation today that it’s up. Yeah,this story is terrible,I might rewrite it as I think my literature skills have increased.

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      • Don’t rewrite it, the problem is as much the concept as your writing. In fact the problem is MORE the concept than your writing.

        When you get a pasta on Crappypasta the tags will tell you what you did wrong, in this case the “Stolen ingredients” tag is telling you that you should not write about other people’s characters, especially ones that are not from Creepypasta initially.

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      • Hi Callum Thomas.
        Your story is “ok” at best. It is a work in progress so I wouldn’t suggest that you give up on it completely. The two things I strongly urge is a big touch up on the plot, wording and overall message of your story. The second is that I STRONGLY suggest is that you post this story on a fan fiction site. I am almost positive that a story like yours would be enjoyed a lot more on a site like that than creepy/crappy pasta. It was a nice try and i wish you the best :)

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        • Oh wow,thank you for your kind words :) however,this “story” needs a lot of work,I’m sorry if I’ve wasted anybody’s time with this story,this site deserves frightening tales,not..this :L I will perhaps do something with it,when the time comes :P thank you!

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          • Well exactly this is crappy pasta it does belong here for now if it’s creepypasta your thinking about it does’nt belong there

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  2. “He stares at me with his erotic ovals, crossed arms, concerned expression as he lectures on about my “worthless”.”

    So…basically he watches you with eyes that are seeking to arouse sexual desire and crosses his arms because he is self-conscious, while bashing you for being worthless? What exactly is your relationship with him again? It sounds like you guys are married.

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  3. This is one of the worst concepts I’ve ever come across. Please don’t let this “a fictional character is real and is haunting me” type of story ever show up again.

    Honestly… Why Madara in the first place, why not something more people are familiar with? Or better yet make up your own fucking character and be semi-original.

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    • It was just for fun. I didn’t even think that the website would take my story,I’m wasn’t trying to be serious but yes this pasta is terrible,I want it off the site honestly.

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  4. (Warning: the following text post you are about to read is of a half-asleep TO flipping his shit. The following message does not reflect the opinions of TO accurately- oh, wait, yes it does reflect his opinions accurately.)

    WHY NARUTO WHY FUCKING NARUTO WHY IS IT THAT WHEN PEOPLE WRITE MANGAPASTAS IT’S ALWAYS FUCKING NARUTO I DON’T EVEN LIKE NARUTO GOD DAMN WHY NOT USE YU YU FREAKING HAKUSHO THERE’S PLENTY OF SCARE POTENTIAL THERE WHY MUST YOU ALWAYS USE FREAKING NARUTO MADARA ISN’T EVEN FREAKING SCARY I WILL SHIT ON EVERYTHING YOU LOVE

    (The previous message did not reflect the views of TO- wait, yes, it did reflect his opinions. Pretty spot-on, as well. Okay.)

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    • ALL mangapastas are bad. Not even Yu YU Hakusho can save the genre.

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      • Challenge. Fucking. Accepted.

        …Is what I would say, but everyone hates mangapastas (and, indeed, fanpastas in general), so even if it did end up scary it would still be looked down upon. And I have better things to do with my time, really. Such as trying to make the ultimate borderlands build, or insulting bad pastas. Or both.

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  5. Hahaha! I found your story amusing, since I’m a Naruto fan. I never could’ve imagine Madara like this!

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  6. I find it slightly amusing when someone comments “this is my first try I know it’s bad blah blah” ok then, it’s your first try why the hell did you submit it if you knew it was shit? Did you expect us to fangasm over it and go “OMFG THIS IS GREAT” no, try harder an sto the sympathy bullshit

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    • I would have thought because it was shit that the website wouldn’t accept it,very blizzare indeed. But this pasta was just for a laugh,a laugh of the lads.

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  7. Wow, the position of first pasta on the page has massive power, this shitty pasta has tons of comments and yet the next one down has none (at the time I’m writing this of course)

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  8. Never in my life did I expect to see a Creepy Pasta about a Naruto character :L…

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  9. This story was weird. The concept that a character from an anime exists in the real world for no real reason is kinda bizarre. The fact that the author doesn’t even acknowledge that the character is from a TV show makes it even weirder. I don’t even really know what to say. Maybe I’m just over-thinking it, but this story was bizarre. So sleep with a gun.

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  10. It’s not scary. Don’t get me wrong, it’s good and all but it’s not scary. Maybe if you want to post it somewhere you can try fanficton.net?

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  11. Are we getting that much traffic now that 57 people have actually voted on this or are people somehow voting their stories up?

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    • What do you mean by traffic? And no,I haven’t voted it up.

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      • What I mean by traffic is that you normally see the ratings receiving less than 10 votes but it seems like the last week or so we’re seeing 50+ votes on them.

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  12. The concept behind this story was all right, but I think it would be better on a fan-fic website and not creepypasta (since it involves a character that someone else created). I actually liked the message that “hatred is born to protect love.” It’s very interesting. Also, it could use editing – you yourself have mentioned this a few times though : 3

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