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Pink Eye

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She got up to go to the bathroom in the middle of the night.  She turned on each light she walked to her destination.  Her room light, her hall light, and finally the light her bathroom.  All the while rubbing her left eye.  She kept rubbing it while she answered the call of nature and then washed her hands, looking in the mirror.
In her blurry sleep vision she could see that her eye was heavily discolored, especially in comparison to her perfectly fine, right eye.  She wondered if something had gotten into it.  She kept rubbing it for a moment and then tried splashing water on her face.   But it still itched terribly.
She decided she would just stop messing with it and go back to bed.  Maybe then it would get better.
The next morning was the same.  But worse.  He eye was still itching!  But even more so.  It was making her pretty angry, she stormed into her bathroom and inspected her face.  Below her left eye was now also discolored.  It was slightly redder and with a blackish tinge.  In looked almost as if he got punched in the face.  And the eye itself was terribly blood shot.
But she could still see.  She figured it must have been pink eye or something.  No big deal, she’d get medicine for it if the problem persisted.
The following night when she got home she was particularly exhausted.  She had gotten a barrage of comments and questions from her co-workers and friends about the eye.  And it was a great annoyance trying to fulfill her duties with it being so severely irritated.  She fell asleep quickly despite the chronic, endless pain that started to seem like it was situated below her eye.
Again, she rose out of bed from the need to relieve herself.  It was sort of a two in the morning once a night thing for her.  She went to the bathroom and again, looked at her bothersome eye.  It definitely hadn’t improved.  The upper part of the left side of her face looked like one big bruise.  It showed sickly shades of red, purple, green, and black.  She was absolutely revolted by the sight of it.  And embarrassed at her new ugliness.
And the pain!  It was unbearable!  She placed a palm against the side of her faced and nearly screamed at how much the freaking thing hurt.  She had to figure out what it was.  She HAD too!  She clambered up onto the counter as to get closer to the mirror and a better look at her eye.  Her eye that had been so bothersome lately.  She stretched her eye socket open as much as she could by pulling downward on the bottom and upward on the top.
All around was the same old story.  Red, and ridiculously bloodshot.  She got even closer and tried to get a better look at the source of pain.  Tipping her head back she could see slight downward, into the bottom of her eye socket.  And there it was!  The source of her pain.  It was a tiny, straight, fuzzy, looking twig like thing.  She wasn’t really sure what it was.  And she couldn’t believe that such a small thing could cause so much pain.  It had to of only been three or four centimeters in length.  She opened a drawer and grabbed a pair of tweezers.
Normally the thought of sticking a pair of tweezers into their eye would make anyone sick to their stomach.  But she was past that.  She had already been sickened by the disgusting pain and irritation that she’d been suffering for the past twenty four hours. So, she was determined on getting the stupid thing out!
She tipped her back so that she could see it again.  Then, she carefully lowered the tweezers in, watching in the mirror, staring at the stupid thing that had somehow lodged itself deep in her flesh.   She couldn’t keep the metal from making contact with her eye and she had let it slide against the irritated tissue in order to take care of the source of the dilemma. Finally she grabbed it.
It squirmed violently until it was free of the tweezers’ grasp.

Credit To – Craver

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18 Comments

  1. Other than some spelling and grammatical errors, this isn’t TERRIBLE. The concept is great, but it needs to be finished.

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  2. Not bad, honestly I think it deserves “undercooked” and “needs more work”

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  3. Upon looking through the other stories I found it was a direct rip off of http://www.crappypasta.com/pink-eye/ also by the same title. Shame on you craver. Stealing a story and deleting the persons name and changing some of the aspects.

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    • Good catch Ryan.
      The question is though, was that the original or were they both stolen from somewhere else? I don’t know why someone would steal and repost a story that was on crappypasta word-for-word.

      The other option is that the same person submitted both, forgetting that they had already submitted once without their name on it. That has happened before with a story called “driving a bus at midnight” (the other version had a different title, “bus in the midnight” I think)

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  4. Having something stuck in your eye is irritating, not scary.

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  5. Ryan, the older pasta’s actually by “Derpbutt” too. Guess they just wanted to repost it and see if they could get it noticed again.

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  6. Wait. What the hell was even remotely spooky about this?! I could write a better story in two sentences.

    “The girl had a terribly irritated eye. She visited a doctor.”

    Done.

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  7. I didn’t find this creepy. Just annoying. I hate things having to do with eyes. I’m going to be thinking about sticking tweezers in my eye for awhile now. Thanks a lot author.

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  8. It was nice and gross. I like a good gross one every now and then.

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  9. how about she accidently scratches her eye out… then a skeleton pops out of her eye socket! lol

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  10. I don’t know, I actually found this pretty creepy in a nauseating kind of way. They did a good job of describing the increasingly gruesome eye, and the writing wasn’t bad (although maybe crappypasta has dulled my senses). Maybe it’s just that the idea of digging around at your eye gives me the willies. I could see where it was going, but that didn’t take away from it.

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  11. Not a bad idea. The concept defintely grabs you in but the ending doesn’t deliver. What was the thing in her eye? Why was it there? Can we have a clearer description of it? It feels as though the story stopped in the middle. What happens next? Nice premise/beginning–needs fleshing out.

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