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The Field

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This came too me in a dream:
One day, a boy named Braden waited for his dad in the car with his brother and sister. His hadn’t come for at least ten minutes. A car pulled up to the shop across the street, and out came a man. Braden got scared as he walked up to the car. The man stepped in, and when Braden tried to get out the man pulled out a knife. Braden knew he was a mad man. All the man said was,”Your coming with me…” in a raspy voice that gave Braden chills. The car arrived to a field surrounded by a large chain link fence. In the middle of the field was a huge pit. Full of bodies. Child bodies. Braden almost vomited at the sight. Now, Braden knew he was a really mad man. He then knew that the man murdered children in devious ways for his amusement and took out a old snow shovel with blood stains on it and threw the body in the pit. Every day, the man would kidnap more kids and kill one. Braden then noticed he had his phone, so he called the police when night fell. The man coughs Braden and slit his neck. The police were still coming, though. When the police came, they captured the mad man and freed the surviving children. The man was brought to a nut house. At the nut house he sat in a room chained to his chair. Braden haunted him. He played with the shadows in the cell. He played with the man. He played with his mind.
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7 Comments

  1. Your coming with me. Mine is coming with you. They both came. Now, their hands are sticky. 1/10

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  2. This is like a really morbid preshool book.

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  3. I overlooked the first line, until I noticed it’d been tagged with ‘We’re Not Your Dream Dictionary’. At least that explains why it’s so hard to follow.

    The plot was unoriginal, and boring. Doesn’t do anything for me, and isn’t creepy at all.

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  4. He then knew that the man murdered children in devious ways for his amusement and took out a old snow shovel with blood stains on it and threw the body in the pit.

    He… he knew all that just from seeing the pit? Was Braden psychic?

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  5. This is a pasta that is pretty much consisting of bad grammar, bad plot, nothing actually scary or creepy in this, and word choices that made it sound dirty rather than creepy (Potato has her mind in the gutter again). Blood and gore does not equate to creepy, and neither does random piles of bodies. Not creepy. Also, why not use the proper term for “nut house”? You know, asylum, hospital, prison, jail, etc. But no. You had to go with “nut house”. Just…no.

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    • It’s the only one he knew how to spell, and you know; nothing ruins a story like shitty spelling.

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  6. Where was Branden’s dad? What happened to his brother and sister? Has anybody realized that all of the children in town are missing? The field has a chain link fence, so how does nobody know about it? Is it just the killer’s baseball diamond/graveyard? How hasn’t anyone in town noticed an open pit full of the bodies of dead children? Like, I don’t care where the pit is, the smell of dozens of rotting corpses would catch someone’s attention. The man would not be put in the nut house. I don’t care what state/country you’re in; a man who kidnaps kids and then kills them and drops them into a mass grave would get the death penalty. Honestly, the biggest and most gripping question I have is this: What in the world would make you dream of something like this?

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