it was a dark and wet night as the rain grew rougher but as i walked back home from my friends house i heard a loud sound saying leave for i have grew in the darkness. it said it 5 more times and each getting louder till the last of the 5 went so loud it pierced my ears. after that i saw a figure appeared behind me. dark and white eyes and following me. i ran till i got home. but when i got there no one was behind me. the next morning it was still raining and i want outside but this time i saw the figure smileing but in the way of physico path and in a few seconds fanished and then things got freakier the neighbors house looked like they we burtaly murder i went in since i know thier son whos is another friend of mine and saw the floor was red as blood i knew they had a red floor but it was a darker red. i felt of the floor and notice it was wet. i looked for the famliy. None were found untill i went back to the living room and looked up and saw that they were hanging from the roof closed eyes and body parts taped to the walls behind me witch i did not see at first anyway in blood was writen one last chance leave leave LEAVE then i felt this fealing that i knew who it was but i was pretty sure it wasnt but i look again and saw in blood remember me ecept it was backwards like this em rebmemer i called the police but my phone said no one can hear your scream then died and smoked. for two more weeks i havent seen the black figure but the following monday of the third week is the week ill never forget no matter how much i tried. it stared a normal day but with no sound except my breath walking and doing stuff i ate breakfast. after that i started to wonder why isnt my mom and dad and brother woke up yet i went to go check on mom and dad and with fear i saw them hanging. in blood i saw Good morning with the smile that the figure had i ran to my brothers room and the same thing happen that day i will never forget and thats the last encounter i have ever seen the black figure.
YOUR NIGHTMARE,
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June 29, 2012 at 1:57 pm
HEY ITS NOT BAD uggg
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June 30, 2012 at 1:25 am
Clean up that punctuation. Real talk.
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June 30, 2012 at 4:45 am
Maybe the basic storyline itself isn’t so bad, but the grammatical and spelling mistakes made it almost impossible to read. The story had very poor descriptions and basically no description in the actual “scary” parts (such as the “figure” and the murder of the neighbours and family).
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June 30, 2012 at 4:16 pm
relly ai laykd de escxelent spleing add garamar
i dnot se wy dis shudlnt b 1 te reel crepypsta it wsa gert
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April 17, 2013 at 1:40 pm
I got cancer while reading that.
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July 1, 2012 at 12:57 am
Oh god, I love this site.
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July 2, 2012 at 8:32 pm
“i heard a loud sound saying leave for i have grew in the darkness.”
wut? … *rereads* … WHAT???
“dark and white eyes and following me.”
two eyes were chasing the narrator? wut?
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July 3, 2012 at 4:16 pm
I wish people on the Internet would just learn to spell already.
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July 4, 2012 at 4:13 am
@Dizzy
Voices are sounds.
You know what’s even stranger than dark and white eyes chasing the narrator?
There are eyes chasing the narrator! Eyes can’t chase!
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February 28, 2013 at 9:46 pm
It’s called personification
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April 6, 2013 at 2:53 am
Christ you’re smart.
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July 10, 2012 at 10:17 pm
Damned straight eyes can chase! … but only if they’re dark and white, you see. Have you ever been chased by dark and white eyes? XD
Or should I say…
u only getchasd bydrk nd whit Is.
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July 26, 2012 at 12:56 pm
Your story is bad and you should feel bad.
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August 4, 2012 at 9:51 am
Basis: Decent. A guy hears a voice behind him, a demon forms, he runs, hides, finds his neighbors slaughtered in a creative fashion, messages to him in blood, can’t call police, family dies by hand of the demon.
Delivery: BAD! Grammar is awful, detail is off, major plot holes, not even a small hint as to why the demon formed to him, he seems to never have called the police, almost no detail to the demon itself.
Over-all: At it’s core, it’s a decent idea, but the writer just didn’t have the skill, or motivation. It seems like they rather tried, and couldn’t do it, or they just didn’t give a fuck.
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August 25, 2012 at 9:49 pm
what? My nightmare is illegible grammar and bad writing? how did you know???
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September 7, 2012 at 1:08 am
That phone died. It died because it was smoking. Smoking is damaging to your health.
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September 19, 2012 at 12:15 am
This story is my nightmare…
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September 27, 2012 at 11:45 pm
This story gave me brain herpies!!
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April 6, 2013 at 2:09 pm
Herpies? As in Her Pies? LOL
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October 4, 2012 at 4:40 am
ERHEMGERD NERR
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October 22, 2012 at 6:12 pm
Those physico paths are a menace, and should be eradicated.
My favorite part: "…the neighbors house looked like they we burtaly murder i went in since i know thier son whos is another friend of mine and saw the floor was red as blood i knew they had a red floor but it was a darker red."
Classic.
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October 22, 2012 at 7:10 pm
I just think i lost some brain cells.
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November 28, 2012 at 10:30 pm
>:)
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December 8, 2012 at 5:52 am
I like the general concept of this story, unfortunately the complete lack of grammar made this crappypasta very hard to read.
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December 24, 2012 at 2:16 am
Wait a minute…Was “none” the only capitalization in the whole pasta?
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December 26, 2012 at 1:35 am
I’m not the “author,” but for whatever reason I feel like I owe the rest of you an apology. I’m sorry this story was ever written. I’m sorry that in some part of the world there is a man or woman this stupid. I’m sorry the story was emailed to this website. I’m sorry you had to read it. I’m just so sorry. We just… we never had a chance.
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December 29, 2012 at 4:05 pm
commas are very important because they show you where thoughts Change slightly but not enough to form a new sentence in fact i think commas are almost as importrant as propper Capitilazaton an spelling r improtrant to make sure people can read ur story yu want to make sure to remebrer to use them all and expecially comma bcuz they are tellin the reader wen is safe to Breath before next senteance start. also i liek wen red floors get redder dat ish cray.
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April 6, 2013 at 1:23 pm
Not to sound rude but, I think you need to use CAPITAL LETTERS at the beginning of a sentence, full stops at the end of sentences and less “Sentanz leik thes” Please,I mean text talk is an eyesore to begin with!
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April 22, 2013 at 7:36 am
I’m pretty positive that they were joking.
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January 11, 2013 at 5:22 pm
IF YOU LISTEN CLOSELY…
you can hear the brothers Merriam and Webster roll over in their graves.
Pfft. The concept is great, but your grammar and spelling need work.
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January 13, 2013 at 5:30 pm
“fanished”? Is that where you’re so hungry you disappear?
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April 6, 2013 at 1:24 pm
According to the author,yes!
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